Not For The First Time: Friday Fictioneers

Anther prompt from Rochelle, 100 words based on the picture below.


The foreman  cursed and screamed. Jesús understood little, but he took the meaning.

The foreman eventually lost all composure, taking Jesús up by the straps of his overalls and fairly lifting him off the ground. His reddening face now inches away, flecks of spittle landing on Jesús’ cheeks as he shouted each word, spacing them so they would land like stones tossed into a pond.


Jesús turned in his tools and walked slowly to the trailer.

Not for the first time he wished his English was better. He could explain, then.


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  1. emmylgant

    The life of an allien resident is not always an easy one.
    Inablity to communicate effectively breeds its own kind of hell.
    You paint a very vivid picture here.

  2. Priceless Joy

    Sad that he doesn’t really understand English and he’s getting verbally abused and a little physically abused as well. I think he may have just lost his job.

  3. kirizar

    I cannot believe how long it took me to recognize ‘why’ the foreman was upset. (Slap to forehead.) Now I really want to know Jesus’s explanation.

  4. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

    I must be a bit thick. I thought it was a great piece as it displays two characters well and the intolerance of one and the difficulties communicating when you don’t know the language as a migrant on the other. I gather from the comments that perhaps this was a story of alien beings. That I didn’t get at all. I too would love to hear his explanation. It could also have been the story of the crucifixion.

  5. dmmacilroy

    This was a perfect story for the prompt. Imaginative, well rendered and written. Jesus has some ‘splainin’ to do, but I think he will acquit himself well.



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