Her hands shook as she fumbled out her keys, the pizza box wedged between her arm and the doorframe. Once inside, she set down the box, and locked the deadbolt and chain, checked the windows.
She grabbed the leftover wine she’d brought home from Saturday’s disastrous blind date and drank straight from the bottle.
She opened the box and ate a slice, still warm.
She’d been paying for her pizza when a man came in, stuck a gun into the cashier’s face and shot her, then ran out.
She’d just stupidly stood there, then picked up her pizza and left.
Dear Josh,
I almost feel guilty for clicking the like button. I can see why the MC is shaken. I imagine she’s more likely to slug back the wine than eat the pizza. Wow. Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Disasters come in three, I do hope she does not choke on the pizza. Take out is a great title.
Sadly, in today’s world, this could very well happen. To much danger in ‘being a witness’ to stay and talk to cops. Did you by some chance yank this from last evening’s news…. just sayin’. :) <3 Now, pass me a slice, I'm hungry…
So terrifyingly true
Well, shame to let a good pizza go to waste…
Shock has different effects on individuals. Tomorrow she may not remember a thing until she sees the news. Then comes the second shockwave. Good picture of her stress.
Yikes. Hope her conscience gets the better of her and she goes to the police with what she knows.
I think she was probably lucky. Like how the title works for both the action and the food. I wonder if the cashier merely had given him the wrong change the day before?
I liked the way you described her reaction to such violence, everyone acts differently and you did this very convincingly
Oh my goodness, what a shock.
who knows how we would react in this situation
You did this very well. It was so plausible and real. Well done.
It’s hard to know how we’d respond to witnessing something so heinous and beyond traumatic. She’s just an ordinary person. Not trained to deal with these situations. She was in the wrong place at the wrong time.
I could see this being the beginning of a longer piece.
xx Rowena
Wow, didn’t see that coming. Nice take on the prompt.
Oh what a night!
Beautifully written. You managed the convey the angst and the uncertain mental state of the poor woman. Very realistic.
Chilling. strange reaction. How could she be hungry after the shock? Effective flash:)
This shocked me so; I had to read it twice.
Wow! A very different take on the prompt. I could feel the characters tension! Loved it.