Word comes down from our senior officers to prepare for evacuation. We busy ourselves making rucksacks and gathering our belongings. I linger in the room and pry up the floorboard to my hidey hole. One of the cartons of cigarettes is missing. In its place is a small German army musette bag. I open the flap. Inside is my gold Hamilton watch, a combat knife, a compass and a wad of folded bills. There is no note, but I know who left it.
I thread my watch onto a shoelace and tie it around my neck under my sweaters.
Pressed for time. This is an excerpt from my novel The Ruining Heaven, the story of a World War II bombardier and his experiences in the war. I am currently seeking an agent.
This is a great excerpt. Much luck with your novel.
When I read the explanation and realised it was an excerpt it made sense
Great little excerpt. I can tell you are pressed for time because you don’t usually do typos! (Glad to see I’m not the only one… ;-) )
Great catch, Dale. All fixed now. It will be our little secret, eh? (-:
Absolutely! My lips are sealed!!
What a great excerpt. Even in this small snippet you have plenty of intrigue and tension to keep us glued to the screen. Really good
Dear J Hardy,
Tight writing as always. Intriguing scene. At some point I will get around to reading your novel.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Hm, interesting: definitely got me hooked, wondering who had his watch and even more so, why they gave it back. As Rochelle said, tight writing.
Great excerpt, I am intrigued.
Happy to send you a copy of the novel if you like!
Is it published?
Yeah, on Amazon. There’s a link to it in the top of my website, but I’d be happy to send you a copy for free if you want one
Just ordered a kindle edition. I’ll start reading it shortly and will do a review. When and if the book I am working on gets published I’ll hit you up to buy one. :-)
Interesting and Intriguing, as the reader I wanted to know more.
A tempting teaser! Mmmm!
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Intriguing.
You whet my appetite for more!
Well, you’re in luck! :-)
intriguing, I love the “hidey hole”wording. Definitely captures ones imagination. I may have to look up your novel. I love history. Have you ever listened to hard-core history podcast with Dan Carlin?
Intriguing start to the story. Need the rest of it now.
That’s a very teasing tempter which works on its own as well. I presume he bartered the cigarettes for the things he wanted back to help him escape.
Sounds like an interesting story is there a link?
Great excerpt, really intriguing.