“Like a drink?”
Without waiting for me to answer she handed me a beading glass. I took a sip. “The good stuff. And in the wedding glassware, no less.”
“I thought you deserved something special after the day you had.” She gentled the back of my neck like I was a skittish horse. “My man.”
I took another drink. “It feels strange. It’s nice to be recognized, but still.”
“You deserve it. I always knew your day would come. Now the world knows what I knew the day I met you.”
“And that is?”
She shrugged, smiling down at me.
I think this is probably a story about a loyal and supportive wife, But there are a couple of things (probably unintentional) that suggest she may have poisoned him,
* I took another drink. “It feels strange>>> does the drink taste strange?
* She shrugged, smiling down at me>>> has he collapsed?
Also should “She gentled back of my neck” be gentled the back?
Oh, right. I left out the “the!” Thanks. Glad you picked up on the sinister aspect. ;-)
I think this is more sinister than the words would have you believe. Really interesting!
Dear Josh,
I saw this as a supportive wife. I loved “gentled the back of my neck.” Love the scene and what might not be being said. (Oy, such a sentence.) Good one in any case.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I’m not sure of her intentions. Or of his longevity, but perhaps I’m paranoid.
We have a sick bunch here ;-)
Add me to the sickos! It was subtly done, but I’m sure there are dark deeds afoot. Why would she say that about knowing what he was like from when they first met, but not say what. And Neil’s right – that link from the drink to ‘It feels strange’ – suspect indeed.
Is it us, or was that sinister undertone intentional. Great stuff anyway
Yep, I saw the sinister side of it.
I agree with some of the other folks here. I think she’s in a lot of trouble.
Most would probably read this as a loving wife getting a drink for gerhard working husband. I read it as an evil wife killing him! But then, I always see the dark side!
It’s a dark-minded group today :-)
Yes it is! Except the photo looks so peaceful!
Yikes! knew your day would come? That’s the clincher for me.
Looking down on him, had me thinking that she had poisoned him.
I thought it sounded sweet until she wouldn’t reply to his last question. Something odd there. Mind you, you simply could have reached the word count.
I have to say I agree with all there was something sinister in this story, it could be because so much was left unsaid which lets our twisted minds run free.
Well, I didn’t think it sinister. I was going to comment “Aw, sweet” until I read the comments. Which is strange for me, as I’m constantly killing people off :-)
I am no stranger to violence in my as well. The idea came to me after I’d had an extraordinary good day at work where everything seemed to to go right. I was struck by how my first thought was to be suspicious of it. I just took that attitude and Infused the characters with it. Perhaps that is what people were picking up on or perhaps that it was just such a short piece that they were able to put their own spin on it. Also, I think we’ve got some very sick people in this group ;-)
I’d like to think we’ve all got it wrong, but I suspect not! Excellent.
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Yeah, I picked up sinister too. Very well done.
It feels like you left it deliberately vague at the end, with the shrug. But I keep thinking she’s supportive rather than sinister. He doesn’t say the drink feels strange, after all; it seems he’s saying that it feels strange to be recognized (presumably at work, where he presumably just had a big, exciting, but stressful day), and she’s doing her part to recognize him, too.
I’m linin’ right up with the sickos. I believe she’s up to no good. Thanks for making us all wonder.
The last line pretty much told me “You gonna die, boy!” Well done keeping the suspense to the end!
I wonder what the poison is? Something that incapacitates first, I suspect. I bet he couldn’t stand up now, even if he tried…
Of course, she could just be a supportive wife hoping to cash in on his unexpected success after years of putting up with his ‘daydreams’.
Huh. More going on here than meets the eye. I can’t decide who the bad guy is–or if there IS one. Great job of keeping us on the edges of our chairs!
I’m not sure if she is poisoning him or seducing him…or both.
Fun read, in a creepy sort of way.
We do have a sinister bunch in this group, don’t we? I am going to choose the positive. Just to be different.