When I woke, the windows were translucent from the dried salt spray. I went downstairs to make coffee.
The power was out, but the gas range was working. I was searching for the kettle when I heard the door. She came in, hair splendidly tousled across her tan, lovely face.
“You won’t recognize the beach,” she said, breathless. “The storm cut a channel through the breakwater. A bunch of boats were driven onto the shore, and there are these huge mooring chains nobody knew about—”
Her words tumbled out like swallows flying from a chimney. God, how I loved her.
Wow! You sure can paint a picture and evoke emotions with your words. Goosebumps of pleasure. :)
Very direct. Very effective. Nice writing!
You left me wanting more. Good character descriptions in a few short lines.
Tracey
What a lovely moment in time. The love between these two is tangible.
Your words just float on the page…or er…the screen. You know what I mean. Lovely scene.
Beautiful write. Such vivid imagery!
Yeah – great description here, almost poetry.
Oh my, love just explodes from your story. Beautiful.
A perfect evocation of the prompt. This is good writing.
Aloha,
Doug
Great. The characters come alive in the dialogue and narration, and the use of the prompt is masterful.