“May I get you another?”
I picked up my glass, shook the melting ice. “No, I’ll wait. She’ll be here any minute.”
“Very good, sir.” He strode back across the patio, watching his tables. The place was filling up.
I glanced at my watch. She was taking forever. I watched the moon for a while, that familiar vertigo making it seem to be moving sideways through the clouds.
“Excuse me, sir,” said a man who had appeared next to my table. He took out a badge. “I am Mr. Norris, the hotel detective. I need you to come with me.”
Ominous and more-ish
Dear Josh,
Well this ended with a big uh-oh. Great ambiance…but you left me hanging. Good job.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Ooh, so intriguing. I like it. I want more!
Thanks, Claire.
Love the descriptions. I could just see him waiting there… and then you just left us hanging… sigh.
I was thinking that his wife had died under mysterious circumstances and he was being summoned. But who knows, really? :-)
Indeed! I’m figuring he’s not guilty at least!
Glad you like it
that familiar vertigo making it seem to be moving sideways through the clouds. Boy! did you ever catch that feeling. This story is so intriguing. What on earth did he do?
You’re right there are similarities in our stories. Nicely done.
My vote is not guilty. Well written.
My Dad’s always waiting for my Mum and I’ll be warning her to hurry up in future.
xx Rowena
Very atmospheric. And now he is in for a surprise it seems.
Oh dear! That can’t be good. :o) Awesome!
Loved the feel and details in this story. Nicely done.
I love an open end and that’s a cracker! Nice one.
My story is called ‘Someone’
Your story made me go ‘oooh’ – well done.
So full of mystery, and I just loved that sentence about familiar vertigo.
Thanks!
The beginning to what I think is a tragic longer story. Nice to know I’m not the only one who gets dizzy when he looks up at the moon!
Busted! I’m very relieved for the intended victim :)
Makes me want to know what happens next!
Ah… where is she? What’s happened? Great cliffhanger.
This doesn’t look like it’ll end well. What’s happened and is he responsible or involved. Great cliff hanger
he is not guilty. The detective will say ,” sorry sir, that was a mistake.”
the wife enters smilingly.
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