Defining Moment

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The little boy is inconsolable, his face twisted and red and sweaty, hot tears staining his shirt.

He’s perhaps three and has just learned the awful truth.

When the other children get taken to see the Disney movie at the Rialto, he will be left behind.

The earth has crumbled away beneath his feet.

Oh, how he screams.  He is all alone. Nobody cares.

He crawls wailing beneath the huge dining table, wraps his arms around the center post while he watches their legs getting ready to leave, hears them all talking about him in concerned tones.

 

Friday Fictioneers

  1. rochellewisoff

    Dear Josh,

    I can always count on you to not follow the beaten path of the masses. It makes me wonder what the awful truth is. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. pennygadd51

    Aww, bless! Sit down with the laptop, and show him a few ‘Simon’s Cat’ videos. That’ll stop the wailing!
    Nicely written, Josh, and a great take on the prompt.

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  3. James Pyles

    Hopefully he will not be literally left alone. My granddaughter is almost three and she can throw some spectacular fits, so I know how this goes. She’s also wonderfully cuddly.

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  4. Lynn Love

    Oh, my word, that’s so good. How you’ve captured that devastation of the very young, that age when a dropped ice cream destroys you with misery. Well done

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  5. granonine

    Poor child, not understanding and it seems no one knows where he is. Sure hope he’s found soon. What a great story.

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  6. Dale

    The child’s “reality” is so much more extreme…
    Most interesting take on the prompt.

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  7. draliman

    I wonder what he did to be left behind? Poor kid, it’s so much “more” when you’re little.

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  8. Jan Vanek

    I love that you went with the table, and from the perspective of a toddler. I hope that the horrible thing was only that he could not go to the movie. That, in fact, would be horrible to a toddler. Well done!

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  9. Alicia Jamtaas

    Ah, the table won in your story (for the prompt that is). Poor little guy. I hope the film doesn’t work and no one gets to see the movie.

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