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Cleo woke to the headlights rolling across the doorway as a car pulled off 66. She roused herself, stretched her sore back.

A man climbed out of the car and came toward her, keys jingling. He wore  khaki coveralls and a cap emblazoned with the Texaco star.

“We’re not open yet,” he said cheerfully. “You by yourself?”

She nodded. “Hitching west. Started in Chicago. Oak Park, actually.”

He unlocked the door and held it. “Well, come on in. I gotta make coffee anyway.”

She went in. He followed.

“Gotta admit I’m a little jealous,” he said, locking the door behind him.


Friday Fictioneers




  1. rochellewisoff

    Dear J Hardy,

    I heard the click in the last line that sent shivers through me. I wouldn’t trust my car to this man who wears the star. Bravo!



  2. Mike

    O dear I don’t like the way this story seems to be going. But very well written

  3. Lynn Love

    So smoothly and confidently written – not a word out of place. Do you know what happens next, because your readers are assuming something truly awful. I’m a bit more open minded … :)

  4. gahlearner

    It’s the locking of the door that gives me the chills, and the oh-so casual asking if she is alone. Great writing, as always.

  5. Poppy Peacock

    Hi – just joined friday Fictioneers and looking forward to sharing stories…

    Brrr… menace sets in for me as soon as he says ‘You by Yourself?’

  6. Maddie's Mama

    I sincerely hope he’s locking the door because he’s technically not open and not because he’s a grungy perv. Either way, this was a great story and very well written.

  7. Isadora De La Vega

    A great deal of visuals appeared as I read this. I felt like she didn’t notice how menacing he was; especially since he asked “Are you alone?” YIKES … curious about what happens next. Great write ….


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